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The plan below shows a school in 1985 and the school now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Here we can see two different plans that show how much a
school
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 has changed since 1985 up to now. The first thing I can see is that the office stayed in the same place and didn’t change
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 size at all,
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 most of the other places in the
school
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 have been modified. In 1985, there were only two sectors with classrooms, one of them with two storeys, but nowadays the
school
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 has three sectors of classrooms and one of them
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 three storeys.
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, I can see the remarkable change in the size of the playing fields.
This
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 one's space has been reduced significantly
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 the addition of the pool and fitness centre. These maps show the changes
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 the structure of the
school
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 and its necessary modifications
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 the number of students.

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Add a clear overview after the first line. Say the main changes in one short part.
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Compare more parts of the school. Now you talk about classrooms, office, and sports area, but not all key parts.
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Use more exact detail from the plan, like where new buildings are and what was removed.
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Make your last line stronger. It should sum up the biggest changes, not repeat a general idea.
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Your ideas are in a clear order, but use linking words more carefully to show each change.
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Keep one main idea in each part. This will make the report easier to follow.
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Some lines are a bit long. Split them into shorter sentences for better flow.
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You clearly say that the office did not change.
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You notice the big change to the playing field area.
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You compare the past and now in a direct way.
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The report has a simple beginning, body, and ending.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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