Topic 1: Young adults are now choosing to wait until later in life, often until they are in their 30s, to settle down and get married. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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Late marriages are becoming
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matter of concern for
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society because young generations prefer to wait until they
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are settled
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down and often
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not
married
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at all.
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change has both negative and positive
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with, young adults want to see themselves financially stable before being
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committed
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to achieve maximum in their career and find
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stability where they can provide for the family. They see marriage as a distraction in their professional path that brings pressure on them to give up on their dreams. In today's world, with high inflation and affordability, these goals are getting way harder to achieve. So, delayed weddings give them an edge to pursue their career and
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enough to understand the meaning of commitment
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in a
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marriage
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. It gives them
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time to choose their partners wisely that resembles each
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other's
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life goals. Recent studies
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that people who are married in their thirties are less likely to
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or divorce On the other side,
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change is impacting negatively
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society as
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causing depopulation and spreading
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loneliness
among youngsters. To elaborate
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this
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,
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body
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its potential to reproduce as it gets older.
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science, the maximum chances to
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conceive
a baby for a woman
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between the age 20
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26 years old
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because of
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recent shift, females and males both are losing their
tendencies to stay fertile
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fertility
. On top of it, food and
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lifestyle
these days
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are making
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it nearly impossible to stay fit and healthy among youth. All these scenarios
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don't
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allign
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align
with the idea of late marriages
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cause infertility and unhealthy babies.
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the number
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of IVF clinics increased drastically in the past 2 decades
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the population in
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countries like Japan is decreasing with every
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passing
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year.
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, giving preference to a
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professional
life is not
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a bad
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idea
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it should not be effecting on personal household. Young people are giving up on
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the idea
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of marriage because affordablilty and
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those
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who can afford
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too busy to make their future. To resolve
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, goverment should take some initiatives to lower the inflation
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youngsters should try to stay fit
as well as
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give importance to
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their personal
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lives.

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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...
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