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The chart below shows the spending (in millions) by 18-20 year olds in one country on five different products in 2010 and 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart illustrates the amount of money spent ( in millions) by 18-20 year olds in a single country on five items in 2010 and 2014.
Overall
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, it is evident that food recorded the highest trends,
whereas
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 books represented clearly the lowest in these two years.
However
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, most of the sectors display an obvious jump over
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 period of time. Regarding clothes, it shows steadiness at roughly 2500
million
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 in 2010 and 2014. Followed by smartphones sector, which witnessed a noticeable increase in 2018, as the spending by these younger individuals reached nearly 2700
million
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 in the same year.
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, the toiletries trend displayed a slight upward trend from approximately 1900
million
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 in 2010 to reach only 2000
million
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 in 2014.
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, the food sector, which clearly takes the biggest share of all the amount spent over the two years, saw a slight increase in expenditure in 2018 to reach almost 4500
million
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "display" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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