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Band 5.5

The bar chart illustrates the amounts of electrical generation and electrical usage in 2014 in ten nations.

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This
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 bar graph indicates the most famous countries, which
contributes
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contribute
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 goods that
produced
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are produced
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, and customer
usages
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usage
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 of
electricity
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 in 2014.
Overall
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, the
production
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 ranks were gradually climbed up in higher figures
in
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, which in
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parallary
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parallel
 increased the customer
consumptions
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consumption
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 as well. China and
United
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the United
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 States
were
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demonstrated similar
increased
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increases
 in
production
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 and consumptions
while
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 Russia, Japan, India, Canada, France, Brazil, Germany and Korea
were
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increased slightly.
According to
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 the details, the lowest ranked country
as
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,
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 Korea
was
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,
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 recorded
electricity
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 usage as 449.5
while
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 their
production
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 modestly moved as 485.1 (billion
KWh
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kWh
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).
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, China was the leading country as
top
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the top
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 one, who was utilized
electricity
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production
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 and consumption, 5398 and 5322
in
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,
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 respectively.
Moreover
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, Russia illustrated a significant figure as it
closely
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apply
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remained stable and maintained the products and demands of customers. Over the same
period
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period,
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 Germany
was
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experienced the opposite
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, of
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of increasing more
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with an increase in
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 customer
utilization
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utilisation
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 of
electricity
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than
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rather than
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 innovations.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, production with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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