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The typical teaching situation of a teacher and students in the class will not exist by the year 2050. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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There are some predictions about disappearing teaching
methods
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 that will be used in today’s world by
teachers
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 and
students
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 in 2050. From my point of view, adding modernised learning
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 with some traditional
methods
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 is the best way to study and teach effectively. First of all, there are many schools and educational centers which are using modern teaching
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 nowadays. Using podcasts, videos and presentations is becoming increasingly popular in today’s digital era. A clear example is that
students
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 feel bored instantly when
teachers
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 only talk about the theme and give some questions.
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 of using the traditional teaching system,
teachers
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 can create some entertaining activities with games and pictures for visual learning , which is beneficial for both gaining knowledge and boosting horizon.
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, most modern learning system consists teamwork. Working in a group give opportunity for sharing ideas, correcting mistakes and hearing ideas from people with different backgrounds. It enhances their problem-solving, interaction and decision-making skills , which are necessary for their future development.
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, maintaining some traditional learning
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 is advantageous in some situations. Getting feedback from a teacher is one of the most efficient ways to learn. In class,
students
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 interact with teaches face to face. If they make a mistake or do not understand,
teachers
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 can explain
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, traditional
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 are more disciplined and structured , which is essential for
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, because they can distract fast with their gadgets
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 as mobile phones and laptops. Conventional systems always push
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 to study and work hard.
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, using a modernised teaching system can bring some benefits
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 as improving the atmosphere of the class and gaining knowledge,
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 a traditional one can be more effective. The combination of both
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 is the best way to both teach and learn.

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Answer the question more directly. Say clearly how far you agree or disagree in the first paragraph.
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Keep the main idea the same through the essay. You say old class teaching will not exist, but your essay mainly says both old and new ways should be used.
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Give one or two more clear examples to support your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Use topic sentences that clearly show the point of each paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas more smoothly. Some parts jump too fast from one point to the next.
coherence and cohesion
Make each paragraph focus on one main point, then explain it fully.
coherence and cohesion
You have a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Most ideas are easy to follow and the essay has a good basic shape.
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You discuss both modern and old teaching methods, so the topic is covered.
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Some support is given for your ideas, like group work and teacher feedback.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • technology advancements
  • virtual learning
  • online education
  • individualized learning
  • personalized learning
  • facilitative role
  • collaborative learning
  • evolve
  • adapt
  • social interaction
  • communication skills
  • teacher-student relationships
  • flexible learning
  • lifelong learning
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