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Writing Samples
Band 4

Some people argue that public libraries have become unnecessary because nowadays information can be accessed from home using the internet . Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages

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Answer both sides more clearly. Say why libraries are still good, and also say if the good points are stronger than the bad points.
coherence and cohesion
Give a clear main idea in each part. Now your ideas are there, but they are hard to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple linking words like first, also, however, and in conclusion to show your plan.
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Add one or two clear examples, like poor families, students, or small towns. This will make your answer stronger.
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Write a short ending that gives your final view. This is needed for a full answer.
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You give some relevant ideas about free use, kids, families, and small cities.
coherence and cohesion
You use some linking words like moreover and however, which helps the reader a little.
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Your view is mostly clear: you think libraries are still important.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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