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Immigration has an important impact on society. What are the reasons for people to immigrate and what are the consequences?

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Migration and travelling to other countries has become rapid growing phenomenon in in the modern day society among vivid many people
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towards attaining
 higher education and
purpose
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the purpose
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 to visit other places.
in
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there
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, there
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 are plathoras of negative and positive
implecations
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implications
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fallows
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. Younger crowd tend to look for higher education and job opportunities
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 the other mature crowd
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 on
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vacations
 in other countries
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during
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 their
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holidays
.
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, increasing
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foreigners
 and multicultural practices in
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 country will lead to social and economical conficts among its people.
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, some
foreigners behaviors
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foreigners' behaviours
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such
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 as shouting, drinking on
streets
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the streets
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, litering and
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trespassing
 on restricted areas
escallats
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exacerbate
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 issue in
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 way.
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,
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tourism
 creates
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 range of job opportunities
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within
 the society and plays
major
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a major
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 role in countrys revenue, by having
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 number of
rival
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apply
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international students.
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this
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 vivid migrating patterns may interrupt
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devastating
 results for some groups
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 as international students,
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 being away
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 their families
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 they may suffer form home sickness and depression.
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migrating will
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migration
 has its unique
benifits
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benefits
 to some
pepoles
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people
 and
also
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 to some
indiviuals
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individuals
, but it is undoughtedly escallates some social issues like
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increase
 of
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illegal
 immigrants and malpractices of the
countries
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country's
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 social structure.

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Answer both parts more clearly: reasons for people to move, and results for society.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear main ideas in each body paragraph. One paragraph for reasons, one for consequences.
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Give simple, real examples to support each main point.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with easy words like first, also, however, as a result, and in conclusion.
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Stay on the topic. Do not mix tourism, study, and holiday travel unless you explain immigration clearly.
coherence and cohesion
Check paragraph order so ideas grow step by step.
coherence and cohesion
You have an introduction and a conclusion.
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You try to discuss both good and bad results.
coherence and cohesion
You use paragraphs to separate ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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