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It is now very easy to get all the news we need online, so there is no longer any need to pay for newspapers or expensive magazines. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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It is argued that the internet provides all the necessary
information
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 , as a results there is no need to spend money on newspapers or costly magazines.
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 saving
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 and provide cricual message on time, reading
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 journal helps to build concentration and focus. On the one hand, an online platform for
news
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 is cost-effective.
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, it provides worldwide
news
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 with a single click , which is cost-saving.
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 is because, for online
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, individuals have to purchase a subscription and renew it on time, where they provide different facilities
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 has youtube, BBC
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 other social media
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 where they get
news
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 about everything. They just need to click on sites.
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, Wordlink is one of the most popular internet providers
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 users pay as per their data range , which starting cost is approxmitatly 1300 per month. And those users get every details
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 through Chrome, not only themselves but
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 their whole family at the same cost.
On the other hand
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, reading online newspapers daily helps to build a strong vocabulary and pronunciation.
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 they have to spend a long
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 reading each sentence
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 daily practice helps them to remember words. Especally student get more benefits because it helps to build reading habits which directly developed focuse on them.
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, most students have poor reading skills even though they have good fluency
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 speaking , and schools always organise reading programs in each class to improve the reading skills of students. In conclusion, websits delivery all sorts of
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 , as a results there is no need to spend money buying paper-based
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.
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 the internet saves money and makes it easy to find world
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 in a single click, paperbased improved reading skills in students, which provides good results in their academic
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task response
Give a clear answer in the first paragraph. Say if this change is positive, negative, or mixed.
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Keep your main idea the same in all body paragraphs. Now your second body paragraph talks about reading skill, but the topic is about paying for news.
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Use examples that fit the topic better. Talk about news, money, trust, or ease of use.
coherence and cohesion
Make each paragraph have one main point and explain it step by step.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words clearly, like first, also, however, for example, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Check that each sentence connects well to the one before it. Some ideas now jump too fast.
coherence and cohesion
You have a clear introduction and a clear conclusion.
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You try to show both sides of the topic.
coherence and cohesion
You use paragraphing, which helps the reader follow your ideas.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • news
  • online
  • pay
  • newspapers
  • magazines
  • positive
  • negative
  • development
  • access
  • cheap
  • free
  • sources
  • readers
  • trust
  • facts
  • fake
  • ads
  • internet
  • update
  • fast
  • local
  • global
  • job
  • paper
  • waste
  • education
  • skills
  • opinion
  • bias
  • literacy
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