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Some people think technology life complex, so we should make life simpler without using the technology. To want extent do you agree ir disagree ?

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I completely disagree
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technology
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 has been one of the most important inventions. Without
technology
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,
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 would be overwhelmingly hard for
humans
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 to live in their daily
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.
Technology
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 serves as an assistant to help make
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 easier for
humans
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. In modern times.
Technology
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 is everywhere in our daily
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 in terms of
education
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 and communication. People nowadays mostly depend on
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 to help reduce problems in making decisions. It's obvious that
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 can come in handy if
humans
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 don’t know how to properly
use
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 it, but that doesn’t mean that
technology
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 can make
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 more complicated in our daily
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. In fact,
technology
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 makes
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 easier and simpler in our everyday
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.
Technology
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 helps human beings to live longer, healthier, and stronger with the help of AI or artificial intelligence. I believe that people around the world
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 AI in many different spectrums
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such
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 as
education
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, decision making, and many more. But it's important that we
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know how to
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 them correctly. New
technology
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such
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 as
AI
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AI,
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 is now extremely effective in terms of hospitality. Over 90
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 of hospitals, world wide,
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 AI to help doctors find cures, make decisions, and enhance their skills.
This
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 is one piece of evidence that shows how effective technologies nowadays are. In terms of
education
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. Schools around the world
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 AI to increase
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education
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 and knowledge. In conclusion, I strongly disagree that
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 can make life more complicated.
Humans
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 should learn how to
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technology
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 wisely and make their
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 easier without causing harm
while
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 using
technology
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.
Humans
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 should learn to adjust their lifestyles
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 the usage of
technology
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 in the past or future.

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Answer all parts of the question more fully. You say you disagree, but you should also explain why some people think technology makes life hard.
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Make your main idea in each body part more clear. Start each part with one clear point, then explain it.
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Use more direct and real examples. Your hospital example is helpful, but it needs a clearer source or a more careful claim.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas more smoothly. Some parts jump fast from one point to another.
coherence and cohesion
Check sentence breaks and punctuation. For example, 'In modern times. Technology' should be one sentence or two clear sentences.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid repeating the same words too much, like 'technology' and 'humans'. Use simple change in wording to make the essay flow better.
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You give a clear opinion from the start and keep it to the end.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body, and conclusion.
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You use examples about health and school, which helps support your ideas.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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