You have been busy with your studies for the past month and haven't had time to visit your family. Write a letter to your grandmother. In your letter:  ● apologize for not getting in touch with her sooner ● explain why you have been so busy  ● arrange a time to visit Begin your letter as follows: Dear Grandmother,

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Dear grandmother, I hope you are fine and doing great. First of all, I
apologize
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that I was out of contact with you. You were always in my mind
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, but
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I was extremely busy
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last
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few days.
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month, I planned to visit you
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exam
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date
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announced
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I had to complete my final
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. I have completed my
project
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before the submission date. I have spent a lot of time
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it,
even I spend
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and I have even spent
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sleepless nights. At the
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moment, when I tried to log in to show my
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to classmates, I came to know that I
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had lost
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all of my data. It was so stressful.
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I was confused and
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felt stressed, but I
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your precious words, that "whatever
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the situation
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, always
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stay calm
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of
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find the solution".
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was the moment when I started finding the solution
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luckily I found its backup
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was not
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complete,
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although
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. I successfully completed my
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before
deadline
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. Now I am free, today was my
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exam. I am excited to visit you as soon as possible. I am waiting for my
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roommate
mate
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she will come
on
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next week.
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her
plan
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I have booked my ticket. I will be with you on Saturday night, as my arrival time is 9:00 pm. See you
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soon,
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pay my regards to grandpa. Your daughter Nnsaaj

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task response
Task response: You answer all parts, but add one clear sorry line at the start.
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Task response: Give a more clear visit plan, like day and time in one line.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Put each main idea in its own part: sorry, study, visit.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Use more link words like because, so, then, and finally.
task response
Task response: You cover the main points in the letter.
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Task response: The tone is warm and kind for your grandmother.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The visit time at the end helps the reader follow your plan.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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