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Band 5.5

Housing is essential for people. Some people argue that the government should offer free housing for peope who cannot afford it. Do you agree or disagree?

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Housing is an important part of
people
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's lives. Some
people
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 think that the government should provide free housing for those who cannot afford it. I agree with
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 opinion because housing is a basic need,
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 there are some challenges in providing it.
Firstly
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, everyone needs a safe place to live.
People
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 who do not have proper housing may face many problems,
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 as poor health and difficulty finding a job.
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, children from homeless families may have fewer opportunities to receive a good education.
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, free housing can help improve their living conditions.
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, providing housing can have positive effects on society. When
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 have a stable place to live, they may be able to focus on work and support their families.
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, the number of social problems related to homelessness could decrease.
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, free housing programs can be costly. Governments need large amounts of money to build and maintain houses. If too much money is spent on housing, there may be less funding available for other public services,
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 as healthcare and education. In conclusion, I believe that governments should provide free housing for
people
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 who cannot afford it because housing is a basic necessity.
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, these programs should be managed carefully to avoid placing too much pressure on public finances.

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For task response, your answer is clear and you give your opinion from the start. To get a higher score, add one more strong idea on why free housing is good, or explain more about who should get it.
task response
For task response, your ideas are relevant, but they are a little general. Try to add one simple real example, such as a poor family or a city program.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, your essay has a clear order: introduction, body, and conclusion. To get a higher score, make some ideas longer and link them more smoothly.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, you use basic linking words well, like firstly, secondly, on the other hand, and therefore. Try to use a few more natural links and repeat key ideas less.
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For task response, you answer the question well and clearly say that you agree.
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For task response, you talk about both good points and one problem, so your view feels balanced.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, your essay is easy to follow and each paragraph has one main idea.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, you have both an introduction and a clear conclusion.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Affordable housing
  • Basic human rights
  • Government intervention
  • Welfare state
  • Homelessness
  • Low-income households
  • Social safety net
  • Economic inequality
  • Public housing
  • Taxpayer burden
  • Housing assistance programs
  • Subsidized housing
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