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The pie charts below compare the proportion of energy capacity in gigawatts (GW) in 2015 with the predictions for 2040.

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The pie chart illustrates the
different
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differences
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of
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energy
capacity
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 and how it
is
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was in the previous year
for
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,
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 2015
and
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, and
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 2040.
Overall
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, the data shows that
upcoming
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the upcoming
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 year will
faced
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face
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 an
increased steadily
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increase
 in
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capacity
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the capacity
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 of
the
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energy. It is
also
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 noticeable that almost all the
structure
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 will
changed
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have changed
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.
While
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 2040
record
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recorded
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 the highest values, 2015 displayed an opposite pattern.
According to
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 the chart, 2040 increased
in
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 2 factors for the Wind and Solar.
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, they have a massive growing than 2015
which
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, which
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 is exceed the half of the
capacity
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.
Finally
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,
this
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 increasing lead to
change
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a change
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the
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capacity
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 in gigawatts from 6.688GW to 11.678 GW.
In contrast
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, it is evident that Fossil fuels, Nuclear and other renewables will
be decreased
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decrease
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.
However
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, Fossil fuels
loss
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lose
 the
capacity
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 to be 44% other than 64%.
Moreover
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, both Nuclear and other renewables will
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remain
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 stable with only one
ore
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or
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 two percentage changes.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words capacity with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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