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The graph below shows the crime rate in England and Wales from 1970 to 2005.

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The line graph illustrates the rate of three types of crime — car theft, house burglaries, and
street
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robbery
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— across England and Wales from 1970 to 2005.
Overall
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, all three types of crimes experienced an upward trend, but at varying degrees. The rate of car theft saw the largest rise,
while
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 the opposite was true for
street
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robbery
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. In terms of smaller changes
first,
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street
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robbery
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 was very small over the course of 20 years. By 2000
street
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robbery
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 rate rose to 0.20
million
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 and stayed stable until the final year. The number of house burglaries started from the same level as
street
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robbery
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 in 2005.
This
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 figure soared to 0.60
million
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 by 1980. Despite remaining unchanged until 1985, the number of house burglaries
subsequently
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 declined to approximately 0.50
million
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 in 2005.
By contrast
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, car theft started with the highest initial figures of 0.40
million
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 and climbed to 1
million
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 by 1990. Before peaking at 1.60
million
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 in 1995. Ultimately, reached the same level as in 1990 by the final year.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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