The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart provides key information about the top 5 phone brands in various
years
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. The units are measured in number.
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Overall
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Overall,
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it is clear from the graph that Samsung and Nokia
sales
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together were the highest in the bar chart .
In addition
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, LG and Apple
sales
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together have a tiny portion .
Whereas
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the ZTE
sales
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was
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were
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the lowest in the bar chart.
According to
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what is shown, Samsung
sales
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increased from 320 to 450
million
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throughout the
years
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2011 to 2013
and
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apply
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,
Apple
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and Apple
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sales
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jumped approximately from 80 to about 150
million
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from the
years
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2011 to
2013
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2013,
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whereas
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Nokia
sales
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declined significantly
about
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by about
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a fifth. In terms of LG
sales
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shown a slight
declined by
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decline of
20
million
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from the
years
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2011 to 2013
and
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, and
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ZTA
sales
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increased
about
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by about
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5
million
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through
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during
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the
years
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2011 to 2013. We did not see any phone brand company
sales
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appear
by
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apply
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this
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year .

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Vocabulary: Replace the words years, sales, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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