Thr graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Carbbean Island between 2010 and 2017

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The number of holidaymakers who travelled to Caribbean islands, over
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8-year period from 2010 to 2018, measured in millions, is illustrated by the given line graph.
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overall
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, it can be seen that the total of
visitors
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whose
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stay on both
of
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ships and
island
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the island
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are
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dominant
one
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,
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with a significant increase
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over
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all the past 7 years.
While
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the
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visitors
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number of visitors
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who
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apply
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staying on
island
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the island
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slightly declined over the
end
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past few
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years.
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, to cruise
ships visitor
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ship visitors
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showed a
fluctuated
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fluctuating
upward trend. In detail, the
visitors
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whose
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who
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preferred to stay at cruise ships was in lowest number in the beginning period,
in contrast
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of
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to
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2013
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, when the
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increase began to rise noticeably, and continued to reach 2
million
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visitors
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in 2017.
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,
in
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apply
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overall
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overall,
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the total
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visitors
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number of visitors
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was the largest number
especially
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, especially
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at the end
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of
period
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the period
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; reached 3.5
million
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of
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visitors
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in 2017.
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, the population stayed an island
at
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during
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the first two years was steady
suitable
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and suitable
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before it
rise
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rose
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dramatically
at
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from
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2011 to
2015
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2015,
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from 0.6
million
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to
reach1.5
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reach 1.5
million
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of
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apply
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visitors
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respectively.
Meant
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increased approximately one-third from the
started
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starting
point.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 3 times.
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