The pie chart below shows the frequency of U.S. Adults’ online purchasing habits in 2015, while the bar chart shows a further classification denoting online purchasing preferences. Summarise the data by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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pie chart illustrates the frequency of U.S. consumers' online
purchacing
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purchasing
percentages in 2015. And
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also
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the bar chart indicates more specific classification rates of online purchasing preferences.
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, the largest part of
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the pie
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chart
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that over
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half
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apply
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of
people
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the people
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shopping oline less often or a few times a month.
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, they
replied
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apply
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usually
buying stuffs
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buy stuff
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through physical
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store
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. Look at the graph more closely, 37% U.S. citizens
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buying things less often, which is the
most
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apply
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highest
rates
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,
following
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a few times a month, and weekly at 28%, 20% respectively. Who replied that
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those who never
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purchased on online shop were at 15% in
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the U.S
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.
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, shopping preference in
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the U.S.
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public who purchase online shows that
significant
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a significant
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percent
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percentage
of less frequent online shoppers prefer shopping via physical
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at about 81%,
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oline one recorded just around 18%.
Similary
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,
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online shoppers and monthly online shoppers indicated more in physical
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buying at approximately 65% and about 59%, whilst online purchase showing roughly 35% and 42%.
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, buyers who
consumming
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prefer to shop
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weekly online
preference
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prefer
to buy
through
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online at about 61%,
as
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while those who shop in a
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real
store
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one recorded
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record
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around 38%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words store with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "indicates" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie chart
  • bar chart
  • online purchasing habits
  • frequency
  • classification
  • summarise
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • demographics
  • consumer trends
  • e-commerce
  • data interpretation
  • purchasing categories
  • fiscal analysis
  • technological influence
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