Your friend has been offered a place on a course at the university where you studied. He/She would like your advice about finding a place to live. Write an letter to your friend. In your email describe where you lived when you were a student at the university recommend the best way for him/her to look for accommodation warn him/her of mistakes students make when choosing accommodation

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Dear Ayushi, Hope you are doing well
and
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congratulations
for
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on
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getting 1st rank in
chess
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the chess
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competition.
Also
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, I heard that you got
the
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admission in the same university where
i was pass out
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I graduated
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. Big congratulations for that too. For your stay,
Always
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always
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find
the
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a
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place near
by
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apply
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your
collage
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so you don't have to commute more for that. I
was
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lived in west hill area
,
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apply
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when
i
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I
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was
studied
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studying
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. Best part about
this
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,
You
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can get groceries, public transport and
librery
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library
nearby, which is top most priority of any of the students.
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, you can check
facebook marketplace
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where
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so many people
listed
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list
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their apartments for renting which is cheaper than others. Be aware of
fruds
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frauds
going on
marketplace
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the marketplace
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where
,
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apply
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landlord
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landlords
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ask
money
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for money
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for viewing and
didn't
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don't
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come back after
pay
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paying
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. I hope
this
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letter finds
helpfull to you
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you helpful
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. See you soon
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best of luck for your future. Best regards, Zarana

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task response
Answer all three parts more fully. Say where you lived, how your friend should look, and what wrong choices to avoid.
coherence and cohesion
Use a clearer order. Put one main idea in each part: place, way to look, and warning.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like and, but, so, because, and also.
task response
Keep the tone warm and natural for a friend. Some lines sound a bit formal or unclear.
task response
You answered the main topic and gave real advice about place, travel, and scams.
coherence and cohesion
You used a clear greeting and closing, which fits a letter to a friend.
coherence and cohesion
The letter is easy to follow in most parts.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • dormitories
  • rental agreements
  • house-hunting
  • budgeting
  • commute
  • utilities
  • security deposit
  • lease
  • proximity
  • amenities
  • landlord
  • tenant rights
  • real estate agent
  • furnished/unfurnished
  • flatmates
  • on-campus/off-campus living
  • viewings
  • public transportation
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