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Around the world, children learn English as a second language at school. However, in some places, they also learn at kindergarten (pre-school care, when children are aged two to five). Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of learning English at kindergarten.

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Nowadays, Many people learn
English
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language
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language
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 at
school
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, some people make their kids learn it from an early
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 as two to five. There are many advantages and disadvantages of learing
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 at kindergarten. The
first
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 benefit of learning
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 is that a
child
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 can develop a fast
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. Take,
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, if a
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 knew the ABCs in
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English
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the English
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language
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 from the
age
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 of two to five, they have a higher chance to obtain a skill of fast learner at
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, there is a recent study
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 high
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 students who learned
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 from the
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 of two
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 able to learn fast in
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 and had good grads.
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, many experienced
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great
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 in life just by learning
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, many students who learned it early
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 easily able to take the
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 test before going to American universities. Unlike those who did not study
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english
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 from childhood and had
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 time doing the test, they got
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accepted
 studying something they like.
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 are many disadvantages of learning
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English
 for younger
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children
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, when a
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English
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,
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their
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 mother
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 will
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disappear
 as they grow older.
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, as soon as they got older, they might forget about their
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culture
, too.
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, a
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 will have an extra burden just for learning another
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According
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research
, they might develop a high level of
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stress
. In
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conclusion
,
childern
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children
 who learn
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 from kindergarden became faster
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 and
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achievers
 in the
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pre-English
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 test.
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,
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children
 might be suffering
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high pressure and might have
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their
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disappear
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task response
Answer both sides more fully. Write a bit more about why early English helps, and why it can cause problems.
coherence and cohesion
Give clearer main ideas at the start of each body paragraph. This helps the reader follow your points.
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Use examples that sound more real and clear. Some examples now are hard to trust or understand.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like first, also, however, and as a result. Do not overuse long sentences.
coherence and cohesion
Make each paragraph stay on one main point. This will make your essay easier to read.
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You answered the topic and talked about both advantages and disadvantages.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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You used some examples to support your ideas.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • second language
  • kindergarten
  • pre-school
  • early age
  • copy sounds
  • speaking skills
  • listening skills
  • natural learning
  • songs and games
  • build confidence
  • feel familiar
  • future chances
  • mother tongue
  • first language
  • family culture
  • clear thinking
  • social skills
  • emotional growth
  • free play
  • formal lessons
  • create pressure
  • well trained teachers
  • poor language habits
  • light and playful way
  • main priority
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