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The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000.

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The bar chart
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illustrates
 the different types of transport
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such
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, such
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 as
bus
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 ,
car
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,bike and foot
to
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,
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 used to
transportaiton
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transport people
 to go and back from duty in one European city in 1960,1980 and 2000.
Overall
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, in the
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past
 the
people
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brefared
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preferred
 to waeking for using the
car
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 ,
in contrast
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 they incrasing to using the
bus
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 and in 2000 many
of
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apply
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people
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take
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took
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 a
car
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 for transport. In 1960,
the
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apply
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35
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precentage
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per cent
 of
individual
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individuals
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 in European city going to work
by
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on
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 foot , and
the
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apply
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many of them usuing bike motoer or cyciala round 26
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precentage
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per cent. Moreover
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, more over alittle of
people
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 had a
car
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around
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, accounting for around
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 6
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precentage
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per cent
 On the
ather
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other
 hand , in
1980
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1980,
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 the
highst
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highest percentage
precentage
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 of take the
bus
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for
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to
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 go and back to duty
it is
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was
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 27
in these
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. During this
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 period
the
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, the
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 highest figure of takeing the
bus
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 . In 2000 centary, the modern society
at begining
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began
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and
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, and
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 the 36 of individual have a cars , after that the
bus
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 came around 16 , but some
of
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apply
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people
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 still using bike and 10 enjoying to go and
back
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coming back
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by
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on
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 foot.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bus, car, people, precentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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