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Writing Samples
Band 1

Some people believe that arts (such as painting and music) do not improve people’s life therefore the government should not spend money on it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Fix the agreement mistake
Others
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 believe that songs and
arts
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not
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do not
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developing
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develop
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 human life and
no
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there is no
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 need
ti
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to
 invest on it , i believe it is important to invest
on
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in
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 many
of
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apply
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human
being
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beings
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.
some
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Some
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 would argue that it is
lost
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a loss of
 time and money to
spending
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spend
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 on
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arts
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the arts
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 .
Linking Words
for
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example
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example,
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 no
benifet
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benefit
 from it and
lsot
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lost
 of
recurses
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resources
.
in
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 my opinion ,
i
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I
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 believe that
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apply
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it is important to give our
intension and time to give a
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attention and time to
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 look
to
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at
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 these
arts
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.
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for
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example
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 in uk they are 35% from there economy from these
arts
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 .
in
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 conclusion , some might think it is not
nucessry
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necessary
 to spend our time on
this
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 music
, i n
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 my opinion i believe that very useful
ti
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to
 study
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this
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these
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 things in the
universty
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university
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Answer the question more fully. Say clearly if you agree, disagree, or partly agree, and keep this idea all through the essay.
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Add more main ideas. Each body part should have one clear point and then explain it.
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Use better examples. Your UK example is useful, but explain how art helps people and why government money is needed.
coherence and cohesion
Make your ideas easier to follow. Use a clear order: introduction, body 1, body 2, conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like first, also, for example, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Develop each point more. Now the ideas are very short, so the reader cannot fully understand your meaning.
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You give your opinion in the introduction and again in the conclusion.
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You use one example about the UK economy to support your view.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a basic beginning, middle, and end.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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