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Task One Pineapple exports The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019.

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The charts illustrate the world
pineapple
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 exports by three producing countries, and
breakdown
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a breakdown
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 of the
cost
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 of one
pineapple
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.
Overall
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,
level
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the level
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 of
export
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exports
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 was higher in 2019 than in 2009. In 2009, in the first place was
country
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B
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 (nearly 4
million
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),
while
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,
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apply
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 in 2019,
country
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 A overcame
B
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 with
dramatic
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a dramatic
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 increase.
In addition
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, nearly 35 per
cent
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 of the
cost
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 of a single
pineapple
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 goes to distribution/retail. In comparison, the lowest 4 and 5 per
cent
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goes
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go
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 to the export costs and the producer. Moving to a more detailed analysis, it can be seen that
country
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B
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 had nearly 4
million
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 metric tonnes of pineapples,
while
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 A and C consisted
approximately
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of approximately
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 0.5 and 0.1
millon
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million
.
However
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, in 2019,
country
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 A increased by nearly 10
million
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.
Counry
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Country
B
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 fell to 1.8
million
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, and
country
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 C grew a bit to nearly 0.2
million
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. Regarding
breakdown
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the breakdown
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 of the
cost
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, 18 per
cent
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are
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is
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 profit, and 16 per
cent
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 goes to taxes.
Moreover
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, 10 per
cent
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are
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is
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 needed to pay
the
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for the
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 import licences,
while
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 12 per
cent
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 of the
pineapple
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cost
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 is international transport.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pineapple, cost, country, b, million, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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