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The chart and table below show the life expectancy in 2008 and increase in lif expectancy between 1996 and 2008.

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The given bar chart provides information about the
life
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expectancy
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 in 2008,
while
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 the table illustrates an increase in
life
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expectancy
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 in 4 countries ,
such
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 as
Japan
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, Korea, the US, and
Indonesia
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, between 1996 and 2008. The given data are measured in percentages.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the average
life
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expectancy
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 is similar
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Japan
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 recorded the highest proportion. The
percentage
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 of increasing
life
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expectancy
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 in
Indonesia
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 showed the largest,
whereas
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 the lowest
percentage
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 was recorded by the US. Observing in detail, the figure for
Japan
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 represented 82.7%. There was a little difference between the proportion of Korea and the US, accounting for 79.2% and 77.2%, respectively. The smallest proportion was recorded by
Indonesia
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, constituting 70.9%. Turning to the rise in
life
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expectancy
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, the
percentage
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 in
Japan
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 was smaller than in Korea, representing 5.1% and 9.3, respectively. The
percentage
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 of the US occupied the bottom position, accounting for 3.2%. The rate of
Indonesia
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 represented 14.1%.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words life, expectancy, japan, indonesia, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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