Nowadays, while some think that it is good for business meetings and business training to be taken place online, others think it has cons. Discuss both views and given your opinion?

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There are different
opinion
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opinions
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about online business training, and
meeting
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meetings
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are useful. Some believe
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it easily to
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access
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convenient
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also
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save time to travel.
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others think in person to
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, and traing more stable, and
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builds
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the workplace
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. In my opinion,
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the offline
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method will be more effective for these activities
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will be discussed
pros
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with the pros
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and cons of
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both views in
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essay. Those who support these online activities are
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beneficial
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employees
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to join because they have several
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pros
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such
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as staying
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online through the internet even if you are not in the same place. But, the
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interruption
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when it unceratain signal, just slightly
to happen,
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, happens;
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it is not a big deal.
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, it will save more time
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travelling, you do not need to worry about either
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absence
or missing.
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, I believe that
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participate
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participating
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in person is the best way to
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communicate
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and
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. Because we have eye contact with each
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other
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also
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we also
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build
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trust by
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in a group.
For example
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, when the company
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organises
training for
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employees
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, sometimes they come from different department, if we want them to participate without
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hesitation
, the organisation will do some activities, like ice breaking for allow everyone
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to get to know
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each
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other
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. Yet, for joining the group
actities
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activities
need to take time to travel
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the place that
company
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the company
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arranges, plus organise
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expenses
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responsibility
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conclusion
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while
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the online meeting
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and training
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are
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convenient, or support our job, in my view
for
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, for
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effectient
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effective
discussion, and practical. Offline
still
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is still
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be
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a
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better way to do.

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Answer both sides in a more equal way. Write one clear good point for online and one clear bad point for offline or online, then give your view clearly.
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Make your opinion very clear from the start and keep it the same in all parts of the essay.
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Use one main idea in each body part, then explain it with one simple example.
coherence and cohesion
Put your ideas in a clearer order. Start with topic sentence, then explanation, then example.
coherence and cohesion
Use easy linking words well, like first, also, however, for example, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Check that each sentence connects well to the next one. Some parts now jump too fast.
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You answered the topic and talked about both online and in-person meetings and training.
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You gave your opinion and kept it to the end.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, two body parts, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You used some linking words like while, however, moreover, and for example.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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