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Your local bookshop has invited members of the public to recommend a guest speaker for an upcoming event that will include a series of talks from well-known people. Write an e-mail to the bookshop. In your e-mail: • suggest a speaker • say what they would contribute to the event • explain why other people would be interested too You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your e-mail as follows: Dear...,

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Dear
Mr.
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 Chris, I hope you are doing well. I would like to say thank you for
invited
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 me to give you some ideas
of
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 a guest speaker
in
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 the next
month
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 event. One of my suggestions is Red
hood girl
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, she is
the
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one of my
favorite writer
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love
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novel
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. She has many famous books,
such
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syndrome
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,
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,
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, and
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love
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 in the
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. I
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 to her podcast
last
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 month, it was quite interesting that she talked about how she
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 a writer nowadays, and how she is good at writing
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novel
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. I think it should
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be an inspirational
 participant. On top of that, she has a lot of her
book
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 fans, espacially teenager. It will be great if she
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this
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 event.
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, I would like to
recommended
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 Arya, she
write
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 the
documentory
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documentary
 about her life, and the dark side of
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 world.
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writer
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book
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 has not
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 yet. That
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 I would like her to come to introduce her
book
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. Even
if
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,
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 her
book
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 has a few fans,
but
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the story in the
book
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 is good. So, it will be another
options
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 for
reader
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readers
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 who like
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 kind of
book
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. Hope my suggestions will help you to determine a guest speaker for an upcoming event. I am waiting to hear who will be the next guest speaker from you. Kind regards, Amy Kim

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task response
Answer all three parts more clearly: name one best speaker, say what the person will add, and say why people will want to come.
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Use clear and simple ideas in each part. Some sentences are hard to understand now.
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Add more real detail about the speaker and the talk. This will make your ideas stronger.
coherence cohesion
Put one main idea in each paragraph. This will make your writing easier to follow.
coherence cohesion
Use easy link words like First, Also, Because, and Finally.
coherence cohesion
Check that each sentence links well to the next one.
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You gave speaker ideas and tried to explain why they fit the event.
coherence cohesion
You included an opening and an ending, so the e-mail feels complete.
coherence cohesion
Your writing has clear paragraph breaks.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • guest speaker
  • upcoming event
  • recommend
  • contribute
  • notable achievements
  • publications
  • suitable candidate
  • knowledge
  • expertise
  • storytelling ability
  • add value
  • appeal
  • wider audience
  • relevance
  • unique perspective
  • highlight
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