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Band 4.5

You are going away from home for one week and you need to ask your neighbor to look after you house. Write a letter describe: •Why you want to go away •What you want your neighbor to look after •If there are any problems, then give instructions

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Dear Uncle, Hope you are doing well, I want to inform you that
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 am going outside for one week.
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 my plan is to join
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the historical tour with my friends.
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 tour begins from
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 upcoming Monday and runs until
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 on Sunday
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 will come back home.
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,
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 have a request for you
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 please look after my home after me.
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 are some basic things. The first thing is outdoor plants, so which plants
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 grow outside the main gate.
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 fill that with water once in the morning.
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 thing is my vehicles, please look at that after me.
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 you have time i want you to just walk around my home and look inside
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 everything.
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, I am writing some instructions for you
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 any problem happens.
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 can read the instructions and enter
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the house to fix the problem. > Spare key,
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 put it in the small port near the main gate. > Vehicles are covered with
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 cover, if you feel any
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unusual
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the house. > The Newspaper provider comes every morning on
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the 7th
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 so
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 was wondering, could you please collect that for me and keep it with you. I am very thankful to you
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 reading
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 will bring
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 memorable gift for you
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 tour. Yours lovingly, abc.

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task response
Answer all parts in a more clear way. Say why you go, what your uncle must do, and what to do if there is a problem.
task response
Use a more even tone. This is a letter to a neighbor, so keep it polite and simple from start to end.
coherence and cohesion
Put one main idea in each paragraph. This will make your letter easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with easy words like first, next, also, and if.
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You answered all three bullet points.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear opening and ending.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas are in a good order most of the time.
Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • look after
  • house-sit
  • feed the pets
  • water the plants
  • retrieve the mail
  • keep an eye on
  • security system
  • emergency contacts
  • spare key
  • unexpected issues
  • precautions
  • travel itinerary
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