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The graph below shows the average house prices in 3 countries between the years 1997-2014.

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The graph illustrates the price
amount
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of accommodation
cost
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costs
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 compared
by
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 three different countries from 1997 to 2014.
Overall
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,
country
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 A was dominated during the given period,
while
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the
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country
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 with the lowest price is
country
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C
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 when compared to the other countries.
To begin
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 with, in 1999 and 2000, the accommodation in
country
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B
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 was more expensive than in countries A and
C
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 , which is around 250k, even in 1997 , which is
further
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 than others.
Nevertheless
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,
country
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C
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 was still lower than A and
B
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, which is only 150K same as the beginning.
Whereas
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,
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country
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 A increased dramatically until 2004, reaching 550.
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, in the final year,
country
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 A had the biggest total , briefly more than about 600. Whilst
,
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 in 2003 the cost of
country
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B
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 rose by approximately 270K,
contrast
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country
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, country
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C
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 still remained at the same figure.
While
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, until the final year
country
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C
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 and
B
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 increased significantly with fluctuations,
according to
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 250 and 500.
It is clear that
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country
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C
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also
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 represented the lowest price in 2014.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words country, c, b with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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