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Take a look at the graphics and complete the task. The table and charts show some information about different sports in one country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph illustrates the percentage of
girl
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girls
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 and
boys
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,
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apply
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 who played different sports in New
Zeland
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Zealand
.
Overall
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, the majority of sports have
wide
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a wide
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 difference between the
number
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 of
boys
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 and
girls
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particapants
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participants
.
In addition
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, netball, soccer, swimming, and other
were
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sports were
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 the most
commom
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common
 among children
,
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apply
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 in 2002.
Also
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 important to mention that athletics, tennis, and basketball had
similar
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a similar
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 level of
boys
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 and
girls
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. Moving to a more detailed analysis, it can be seen that netball had the highest
number
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 of
girls
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 (25%).
However
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, it
also
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 had the smallest
number
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 of
boys
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 (0,5%).
On the other hand
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, approximately 25% of
boys
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 were interested in soccer,
while
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 only 5% of
girls
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 played it. Swimming was
also
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 one of the most popular
sport
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sports
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 with 22% of
girls
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 and 13% of
boys
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. In
compariosn
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comparison
,
other
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others
 had 10% of
girls
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 and 18% of
boys
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. From another perspective, basketball and tennis both got nearly 7-8% of
boys
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 and
girls
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. Cricket and martial arts
remained
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had
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 the lowest
number
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 of
girls
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. 0,5 and 3% respectively. Despite
this
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 fact, they had 11% and 9% of
boys
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respectively
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, respectively
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.
Also
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 important to mention that
athletic
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athletics
 had 4% of
boys
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 and 5% of
girls
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words boys, number, girls with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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