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The graph above gives information on the differences in clothing exports from three different countries.

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The line chart illustrates the comparison of clothing
exports
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 in
Colombia
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comparison
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,
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 Japan
and
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, and
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 Myanmar between 1999 and 2003 As the graph shows
that
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,
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 clothing
exports
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 off 3 nations fluctuated over the period. Specifically, clothing
exports
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 of
Colombia
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 had a
slightly grow
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slight growth
.
While
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 Japan
slowly
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is slowly
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go
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going
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 down and Myanmar
had
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has
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 a significant change, the rose sharply of Myanmar’clothing figure In terms of the number of clothing
exports
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 in
Colombia
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, there was a
gradually
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gradual
 increase from 5
millions
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million
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 in 1999 to 7
millions
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million
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 in 2002. The date decreases
slow
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slowly
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 by 1
million
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 between 2002 and 2003. During the period from 1999 to 2001, there was a
considerably
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considerable
 climb
by
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of
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 95
millions
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million
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 between 1999 and 2001 in Myanmar
and
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, and
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 it
drop
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dropped
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 by approximately 6
million
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 from 2001 to 2003. Regarding Japan’s data, the statistics for clothing
exports
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had
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showed
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 no change
more,
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;
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 it
rise
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rose
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 from 1999 to 2001 by
arround
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around
 1
million
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. There was a slightly go down 600 in 2001 to around 490 in 2003. Turning to the figure for clothing
exports
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 in Japan, there was a substantial fall of about 1
million
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 between 1999 and 2003.
Colombia
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rise
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rose
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 by approximately 15
million
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 between 1999 and 2003. Myanmar’s
statistic
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statistics
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 for clothing had a
substantially
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substantial
 jump over the period

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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words exports, colombia, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go down" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "substantial" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • clothing exports
  • country
  • highest
  • lowest
  • rise
  • rise steadily
  • increase
  • fall
  • decrease
  • grow
  • drop
  • change
  • stay the same
  • peak
  • reach a peak
  • hit a high
  • gap
  • difference
  • big gap
  • narrow gap
  • widen gap
  • compared with
  • in contrast to
  • whereas
  • over the period
  • from ... to ...
  • trend
  • pattern
  • overall
  • in general
  • year
  • data
  • show
  • indicate
  • point out
  • lead
  • lead in exports
  • top country
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