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The chart and table below show the results of a survey of library users at a university. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie chart compares the percentage of library users categorised under five groups,
while
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 the table demonstrates the
result
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results
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 of
satisfaction
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the satisfaction
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 assessment towards five facilities. In general, full-time undergraduate students record the biggest slice compared to others,
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 the lowest figure
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 by the distance learning and academic staff groups.
On the other hand
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, a major visitor value helpfulness of
librarian
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the librarian
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 with
very
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a very
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 satisfied report
the
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, the
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 highest percentage.
In addition
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, the availability of journals and reliability of wi-fi generate a significant number
on the
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of
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 not satisfied
level
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levels
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.
According to
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 the diagram, it is evident that a considerable portion of library visitors are full-time undergraduate
, amounting
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students, amounting
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 to nearly half of
the
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all users. In the second highest users, both full-time postgraduate and part-time
postgrad
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postgraduate
 record a significant modest slice, the former make up
higher
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a higher
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with
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proportion with
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 a quarter,
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 the latter a bit lower with 16%.
In contrast
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, the remaining two groups are the lowest figure, forming
a few
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fewer
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 than a tenth. Taking a closer look at the table, it can be observed that the helpfulness of staff
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 in the biggest amount
on
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in
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 the very satisfied class. The library opening hours
also
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 generate a higher mark (65%)
on
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in
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 the very satisfied
, with
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category, with
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 the 35% in the fairly satisfied
unit
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category
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.
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, three others report a similar amount between the higher and middle assessment, and they
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 for a slight percentage on the not satisfied level (10%-20%).

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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