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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island betwen 2010 and 2017

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A glance at the graph provides the
number
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 of tourists visiting a Caribbean
island
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 from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
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, the total
number
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 of
visitors
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 experienced a three-and-a-half
time
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times
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 increase across the mentioned 8 years, rising from 1
million
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visitors
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 to 3.5
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visitors
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million visitors
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.
According to
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 the information shown on the graph,
visitors
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 tended to stay on the
island
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 before 2016.
However
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, the trend changed in 2016 when the
number
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 of
visitors
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 staying on cruise ships exceeded that of
the ones
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those
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 staying on the
island
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 and reached 1.5
millions
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million
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. The figures of tourists stayed on the
island
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 plateaued at 1.5
million
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peope
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people
 from 2013 to 2015 and dropped to 1.3
million
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 people in 2016.
Although
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 the
tendancy
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tendency
 went back to 1.5
million
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visitors
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 in 2017, the preference
of
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 staying on cruise ships had grown to 2
million
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 people. What should be particularly mentioned is that the total
number
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 of tourists encountered a plateau at 2.7
million
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 people between 2015 and 2016, which was the same period that
vistors'
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visitors'
 preferences dramatically changed.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, island, visitors, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 2 times.
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