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The internet is amazing and has changed the world. Give the advantages and disadvantages of the internet

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Internet
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The Internet
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 is one of the most important inventions
in
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of
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 the
last
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 decade .It has many advantages .
First,
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communication became much easier than before because of
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internet
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the internet
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 .It made people more social .Lots of apps came out because of
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internet
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the internet
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 .
Such
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 as Instagram, Snapchat,
Tiktok
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, and X
.
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apply
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Second,
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education
improved
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has improved
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alot
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a lot
 in the past years.
In addition
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,
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internet
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the internet
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 became the main resource in getting
informaton
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information
.Wherever we
go
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go,
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 we use it for getting information about the place we're in .Even when asking
any one
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anyone
 about
anything
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anything,
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 the first thing they do is
openning thier
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open their
 phone and search
in
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on
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 the
internet
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 .
Finally
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, education
bacame
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has become
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 much
more
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better in the past 30 years.
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Internet
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The Internet
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made
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has made
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 education easier for students .It offers many websites for them to study.

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Write about both good and bad sides. Your essay now talks only about good sides.
coherence and cohesion
Add a short end part to sum up your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear group parts: one part for good sides and one part for bad sides.
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Give one or two real examples for each main idea.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like first, also, however, and finally.
coherence and cohesion
Check repeat ideas. You say education is better two times.
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You stay on the main topic: the internet.
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You give clear good points like talk, study, and get information.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas are easy to follow most of the time.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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