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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graphs
compares
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compare
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 the
amount
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number
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 of
tourists
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 visiting
in
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the
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 Caribbean
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island
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islands
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 over a period of 7 years.
It is clear that
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 the total was by far the most popular of
tourists
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vistiting
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visiting
 a
Carobbean
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Caribbean
island
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 over the period shown.
Visitors
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 staying on
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island
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the island
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waas
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were
 the lowest amount of
tourists
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in
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apply
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each year. In 2010, the total
of
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number of
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 visiting
tourists
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were
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was
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 1
million
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. The
vistitors
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visitors
 staying on
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island
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the island
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around
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are around
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 0.6
million
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,
while
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visitors
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the visitors
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 staying on cruise ships
0.2
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are 0.2
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million
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. Between 2015 and 2016, the
visitors
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 staying on cruise ships overtook the
vistitors
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visitors
 staying on
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island
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the island
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 have more
visitors
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. Between 2010 and 2017, the total
of
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number of
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 visiting
tourists
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were
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rose dramatically to a peak of 3.5
millions
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million
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.
By contrast
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, the
visitors
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 staying on cruise ships fell to only 0.2
million
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 in 2012, and
then
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 rose significantly to 2
millions
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million
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 in 2017. The
vistitors
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visitors
 staying on
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island
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the island
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risse
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rose
 slightly
around
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from
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 0.6
million
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 to 1.5
million
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 from 2010 to 2017.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, island, visitors, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Tourists
  • Caribbean
  • Visit
  • Graph
  • Summarize
  • Trend
  • Fluctuate
  • Peak season
  • Anomalies
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Comparisons
  • Sector
  • Significant
  • Patterns
  • Overview
  • Analyze
  • Data
  • Year-on-year
  • Percentage
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