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Band 1

In many countries today people are choosing to have fewer children. Why is this the cause? What are the effects of this trend on the society?

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In many regions, some people prefer to have
less
Correct determiner usage
fewer
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 kids than before.
the
Capitalize the word
The
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 main cause is perants have lack
in
Change preposition
apply
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money, thats lead to children
may get
Wrong verb form
getting
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 depressed as they
me
Verb problem
may make
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 some connections with the family . I think the primary reson of haveing less babies is
most
Correct word choice
that most
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 perants watching some problems to afford more babies, because every thing become more expensive.
For example
Linking Words
, around the
world
Add a comma
world,
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 the rents have a significant
inceasing
Replace the word
increase
. One of the consequences of
lacking in
Correct word choice
low
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 birth rates is
haveing
Correct your spelling
having
 less connection with the family. Some studies record
,
Correct word choice
that
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 people who have
less
Correct determiner usage
fewer
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 siblings
they have
Verb problem
are
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 more
probability
Replace the word
likely
 to get
depress
Replace the word
depressed
.

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task response
Answer both parts more fully. Say why people have fewer children and then say more than one effect on society.
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Make your ideas clearer with simple full sentences. Some parts are hard to understand now.
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Give one real and clear example for each main idea.
coherence and cohesion
Use a clear 4-part plan: intro, cause, effects, end.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with easy words like because, so, also, and, but.
coherence and cohesion
Support each main point with one more sentence to explain it.
task response
You answered both the cause and the effect, so you stayed on the topic.
coherence and cohesion
You used paragraphs to separate your ideas.
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You gave one example about high rent and high costs.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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