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The graph below shows changes in global food and oil prices between 2000 and 2011.

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The line graph compares the average
price
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 of
oil
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 with the
food
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price
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 index from 2000 to 2011. 
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, the average global
prices
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 of either
oil
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 or
food
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 increased constantly throughout the first years.
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, the trends for
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 productions fluctuated on the record. In 2000, the average
price
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 of
oil
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 was close to 25 per barrel, and the
food
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price
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 stood at just 90
points
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. In the next seven years,
both
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prices
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rise
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 moderately until 2004 and
then
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 steadily grew between 2004 and 2007. The
oil
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price
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 doubled, to nearly 60 per barrel
,
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similarly
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, the
food
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price
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 index actually climbed to 140
points
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. A dramatic increase in
both
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 commodity
prices
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 was seen from 2007 to 2008, the
oil
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price
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 reaching a peak of nearly 130 per barrel and the
food
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rising
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price rising
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 to 225
points
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.
However
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, the
price
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 of
oil
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 and
food
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 noticeably plummeted to 35 and 141 in 2009, respectively.
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,
both
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of
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item
prices
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 constantly changed before surging until the end of the period, the highest
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prices
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price
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 of
food
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 was recorded at 240
points
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and
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, and
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 the
oil
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price
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 almost rose again to 100 dollars.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words price, oil, food, prices, both, points with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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