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Nowadays parents are sending their children to trips abroad for educational purpose. What are the advantages and disadvantages of it?

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From
earliy time
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early times
,the parents
always have
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have always
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 been looking for a good
education
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 for their kids. At
this
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 days they are tending to seek
for
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apply
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a high
qulitey
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quality
 of learning in
specefic
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specific
 countries
they
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that
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 have a top level of
education
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 standard (ranking) like
westren
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Western
 countries, China and
USA
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the USA
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. In
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essay
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the
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both benifiet and
downside
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downsides
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 of
the
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leaving your country and looking for a peak
education
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 worldwide.
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firstly
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, if we see the picture from the side of the advantages of being
international
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an international
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student
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. We can see vividly westran univesities and institutes have a far distance in
education
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 quality than
that
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those
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 we have in
africa
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Africa
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 and arabian area. Because they give
studant holestic
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students holistic
education
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 not just academic learning.
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, many of
student
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 they completed
thier
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their
education
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 in
UK
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the UK
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, USA and
china
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China
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 and
come
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came
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 back to their own country
we
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, we
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 found
them
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that they
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 are different in all
side
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aspects
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 of life economicely, healthly and have
a
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apply
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good
anylization
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analytical
 skills. In other hand, if we look
to
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at
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 studying overseas from darkside. We can
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 clearly
alots
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that a lot
 of
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student
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students
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 lost their
cluture
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culture
 through integration with
diversity
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diverse
 people and get from them many habits and behevior they do not suitable with the community
which
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they
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 come from.
By
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 that reason, we found
numbers
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a number
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 of parents oppendent the idea of sending their teenager to study abroad.
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, as we
mention
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mentioned
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 previously, we can see that
colorfuly
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colourful
,
studing abrod
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studying abroad
 had enormous benficial compering staying in
you
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your
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 own country and
complet
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completing
 your
leaning
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learning
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 inside.
Also
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, to answer the
fortinant
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fears
 of parents about losing the new genration our cultures and
behvior
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behaviour
 change .
we
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 can say that are depend how
deep
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deeply
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 we engaging
student
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 with our
cltures
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cultures
 and history.

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Answer both sides more clearly. Write one clear good point and one clear bad point.
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Add a short opinion in the end. Say if the good side is stronger or not.
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Use simple examples with clear detail. One real and clear example is better than many general lines.
coherence and cohesion
Make each paragraph have one main idea only.
coherence and cohesion
Use easy link words like First, Also, However, and In conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Check that each sentence follows the one before it in a clear way.
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You answered the main topic and talked about both good and bad sides.
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You gave an example about students who come back after study abroad.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body, and ending.
coherence and cohesion
The paragraph order is easy to follow in general.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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