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The graph below shows the qatari import totals( in tons) for several types of vegetables from 1980 to 2020.

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import
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 totals, in
tonnes
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, for several types of vegetables between 1980 and 2020 are demonstrated in the graph below.
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import
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 totals for broccoli and garlic experienced a steady increase,
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while
 for spinach, it declined. Meanwhile, it almost remained unchanged for peas before it increased a bit in the end. The
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 totals for ginger increased before
2010
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 when it decreased and reached its previous level. The
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qatari
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import
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 totals
Broccoli
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 and garlic,
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accounting
 for 200
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 and about 300
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, respectively, experienced the highest increase compared to other vegetables, and
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 reached about 300 and 400
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 total
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, respectively.
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 spinach, starting at the highest level, about 500, declined to just about 380
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 the end of the period.
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qatari
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 totals for peas remained unchanged, at about 100, before 2010 when it first demonstrated a modest increase and
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achieved
 about 130
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, for ginger it increased from over 200 to about 300
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 in 2000, and declined until the end of the period, almost reaching its initial indicator.

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