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The internet is an amazing invention which has changed the world and how people live. Give the advantages and disadvantages of the internet.

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Introduction
The
internet
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 has changed the world. Many
people
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use
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 it regularly. It has made a great impact on society.
This
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 essay will examine the advantages and disadvantages of the
internet
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.
Body paragraph 1
there
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 are many advantages of the
internet
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 .
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first
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,
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internet
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the internet
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have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
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 information.
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people
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People
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use
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internet
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the internet
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 to
stude
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study
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also
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Also
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,
thay
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they
 can
tech a
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teach
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 new
langueges
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languages
.
second
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, some
people
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use
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 it to comuncation.
thiar
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There
 are many
people
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use
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who use
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 the snabchat ,
instgram
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Instagram
,facebook to send
masseges
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messages
.
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also
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Also
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, it
help
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helps
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 to care about family and
frends
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friends
.
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finally
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,
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internet
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the internet
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used
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is used
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 for fun.
it
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It is used
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use
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 to play vedio game.
also
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people
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 used to
speand thair freetime
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spend their free time
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Body paragraph 2
there
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 are many disadvantages of the
interne
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internet
.
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first
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First
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,
it
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it's
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 bad for
halth
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health
.
thair
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There
 are
people
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 speand long time in
internet
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 and forget
the
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their
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normal life.
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also
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Also
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, it is bad for
eyes
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the eyes
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.
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second
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Second
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,
thay
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there
 are many hackers.
the
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The
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 hackers can take information and
mony
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money
.
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also
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Also
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,
thay
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they
 now
were
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apply
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are
you
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where you
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 live.
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finally
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Finally
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, there
no
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is no
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 privacy.
many
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Many
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people
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 share his life in
internet
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.
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also
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Also
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,
people
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now
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know
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 your secret.
Conclusion
In conclusion, it is clear to see that the
internet
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 has given society many advantages.
However
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, it has
also
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 provided some disadvantages.

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coherence cohesion
Write one clear main idea in each body part, then add one or two simple support lines.
coherence cohesion
Use easy linking words well, like first, second, also, however, and finally.
task achievement
Give a more full answer by explaining why each good and bad point matters.
task achievement
Add simple real examples, like study online, talk to family far away, or lose money from scams.
task achievement
Check that every idea fits the topic of internet good points and bad points.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and a clear ending.
task achievement
You talk about both good points and bad points of the internet.
coherence cohesion
Your ideas are easy to follow because you use first, second, and finally.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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