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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is true that chatting with others can creat disunderstanding problem in chat.
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 the viewpoint that there is nothing between different
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daily communication. On the one hand, the more demonstrate is there are
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 challenges between our conversation.
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, I really believe that different
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 the hospital, supermarket and etc, which will influence the
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 will be impact to lack of willingness to communicate.
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for some
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 can talk easily by using devices to translate.
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 means that we can chat with each other without any obstacles, which AI can currently translate and eliminate the cracks between pupils. In conclusion,
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, it still will create
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 between
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Answer the question more directly. Say clearly if you agree, disagree, or partly agree, and keep this same view in all parts.
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Write ideas in a clearer way. Some sentences are hard to understand, so your main point is not always easy to follow.
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Use simple and real examples. For example, talk about problems at work, at school, or in a hospital.
coherence and cohesion
Make each body paragraph have one clear main idea. Then explain it with one or two simple supporting points.
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Link ideas more carefully. Words like on the one hand and on the other hand are used, but the meaning after them is sometimes not clear.
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Check sentence order and word choice so the reader can follow your meaning more easily from start to end.
coherence and cohesion
You wrote an introduction, two body parts, and a conclusion.
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You tried to discuss both sides of the topic.
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You used some linking words such as firstly, in other words, and in conclusion.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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