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One of your neighbor’s children has accidentally broken the front window of your ca r. You should write a letter to his/her parents and in your letter you should • introduce yourself • explain how it happened • and what they should do.

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Dear Mr X, I am your neighbour residing at house number 8, behind the playground. I had to write
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incident involving my parked vehicle and your kids. Yesterday, your children were playing close to the boundary of the park, and
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 suddenly one of your kids pelted a stone towards my car. The stone went directly through the front glass of my car, shattering the glass. When I came out of my house after listening loud noise, I saw your children running away. The damage is already done, and it would cost me around 500Cad to fix that glass, as my car is from the limited edition, and it is very difficult to source the parts for
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 type of vehicle. I will suggest
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 that you should ask your kids how it happened, and please next time make sure that there is an adult with them when they are playing outdoors. Yours truly, S

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task response
Task response: say more clear what you want the parents to do, for example pay for the glass or call you.
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Task response: use a more polite tone in some lines, so the letter sounds firm but calm.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: make the story step by step with clear link words like first, then, and after that.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: keep one main idea in each part: who you are, what happened, and what action you want.
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Task response: you answer all three points in the question.
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Task response: the problem is clear and easy to understand.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: the letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: the closing is suitable for a formal letter.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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