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Some people think that children should only read academic book. Other believe that reading books for pleasure is equally important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some people think that
children
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 should only read academic
book
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books
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, but
other
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others
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 believe that reading
books
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 for
pleasure
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 is equally important. I partly agree that reading
books
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 only for
pleasure
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 is important. Some think that
children
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 should read academic
books
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.
This
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 they want their
kids
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know
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to know
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 a lot and in every
talking
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conversation
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 can answer bravely.
Moreover
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, reading
acadimic
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academic
books
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 is improving a vocabulary of their
kids
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 and
children
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 can speak early. In
Englang
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England
, a lot of parents tell tales
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to
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 their
children
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and
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, and
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 later, their
kids
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 adore to read
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, which
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 can help in school and university.
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, some people believe that reading academic
books
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 is essential for every
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kids
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kid
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.
On the other hand
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, I side who believe that reading
books
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 for
pleasure
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 is absolutely important. The main reason is that we should not force reading
to
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on
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children
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, later it can be an important factor which destroy their desire to read something. In
USA
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the USA
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, most
kids
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 who
make them
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are made to
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 read have never read in adulthood.
Therefore
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, reading
books
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 must be your own choice. In conclusion, some people think that
children
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 should only read academic
books
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.
Although
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,
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apply
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 I think that reading
books
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 should be
with
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a
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pleasure
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.

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task response
Answer both sides more fully. You talk about school books and fun books, but each side needs more detail.
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Give your opinion in a clear way from the start and keep it the same all through the essay.
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Use better examples. The ideas about England and the USA are not clear and do not feel strong.
coherence and cohesion
Make each main idea easy to follow. Some lines are hard to understand because the meaning is not clear.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like first, also, however, and so. Do not use too many commas.
coherence and cohesion
Build each body paragraph around one main point, then explain it, then give an example.
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You discuss both views and give your own opinion, so you answer the main task.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has an introduction, two body parts, and a conclusion.
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Your opinion is clear in the second body paragraph and in the end.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic books
  • reading for pleasure
  • structured reading
  • discipline
  • focus
  • imagination
  • creativity
  • emotional intelligence
  • empathy
  • well-rounded education
  • language skills
  • lifelong learning
  • balanced approach
  • child’s development
  • stimulate
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