Many people feel it a waste of money to try to save the endangered animal species, for example the tiger or the blue whale. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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A huge part of the population believes that the use of money on trying to preserve the
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of animals that are in danger is not
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necessary
. Critics
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that money should be
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on solving the
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problems
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as poverty or pollution.
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, I strongly disagree with
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perspective, as investing in
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wildlife preservation is a vital step for maintaining
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global ecological stability. On the one hand, the opponents of the wildlife funding argue that it is financially reckless to preserve single
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of animals when there are millions of humans who suffer from
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of basic education and malnutrition. They
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view
conservation as a luxury that most of the nations are not able to afford.
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it is true that human welfare is crucial,
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argument assumes that human survival is independent
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the natural world.
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, protecting the tigers requires preserving vast areas of forests.
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, in turn, saves the natural watersheds that supply clean drinking water to millions of humans. In reality, neglecting the biosphere to solve short-term human crises is a strategy that leads to greater long-term economic disasters.
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, the financial investment required to
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save
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endangered
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is entirely justified when considering the concept of ecosystem services. Predators like the tiger or marine giants like the blue whale play irreplaceable roles in their habitats.
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, blue whales contribute significantly to ocean
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, stimulating the growth of phytoplankton, which absorbs immense volumes of carbon dioxide.
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, funding wildlife conservation is, in essence, a highly cost-effective method of combating climate change and preventing the collapse of ecosystems on which human agriculture and economies depend. In conclusion, I completely disagree with the notion that funding the preservation of endangered
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is a waste of money. Far from being an expensive ecological hobby, conservation is a critical investment in the planetary infrastructure that sustains human life. Governments should increase, rather than diminish, financial commitments to environmental protection to ensure a sustainable future.

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Check small grammar and word form errors, like 'necessary', 'spend' to 'spent', and 'thinks' to 'think'. These mistakes can lower your score.
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Make your first sentence more direct. State your opinion in a clear and simple way at the start.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas are strong, but some sentences are very long. Shorter sentences can make your meaning easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words carefully. You already use good ones, but do not overuse long phrases.
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Add one more very clear example from real life or a known case to make your support even stronger.
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You answer the question fully and give a clear opinion from start to end.
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Your main points are well explained and stay on topic.
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The essay has a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.
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Your paragraphs follow a logical order and ideas connect well.
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Examples about forests and blue whales support your ideas well.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • endangered species
  • biodiversity
  • intrinsic value
  • existential threat
  • ecosystem
  • conservation
  • economic benefits
  • funding allocation
  • competing needs
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