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The pie chart compare people travel to a university for work or study by differet vehicles

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The two pie charts compare the percentage of
people
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 moving to a
university
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 for work or study
task
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 using different vehicles between 2004
to
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and
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 2009 in
United
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the United
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 Kingdom.
Overall
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,
higher
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a higher
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 proportion of
people
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prefered
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preferred
 car and bus as lower percentage
travelled
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travelling
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 by
train
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train,
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while
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 there is a slight difference in the ratio of walking. In 2004,
people
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 used their personal car for moving
in
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to
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university
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 for
reasearch
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research
 and other kinds of activities was about 51%.
However
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,
travelling by bus ratio
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the ratio of travelling by bus
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 was 33 percent as the 9% citizens go to college by bicycle. A small proportion of
people
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 account for 3
%
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take the benefits of public transport. A tiny fraction of around 4% walk by foot to reach
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university
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the university
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 on time. As in 2009,
a
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the
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 largest proportion of
people
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 take the facility of bus were 46%.
Moreover
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, 28% drive their private vehicle
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such
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, such
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 as
car
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a car
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.
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People go
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The ratio of people going to university by bicycle
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university
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 by bicycle ratio increased significantly to 16% as compare to previous years. A
smallest
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small
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 portion of around 6
percent
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per cent
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 walk on foot to achieve their goals.
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, a tiny fraction of 4% took
train
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the train
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 to
reached
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reach
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 their destination.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, university with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "compare" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • the pie chart shows
  • the chart compares
  • people travel to the university
  • for work or study
  • by different vehicles
  • the largest share
  • the smallest share
  • a high proportion
  • a low proportion
  • public transport
  • private transport
  • active travel
  • by car
  • by bus
  • by train
  • by bike
  • on foot
  • accounts for
  • makes up
  • is higher than
  • is lower than
  • is more common than
  • is less common than
  • in total
  • overall
  • in contrast
  • while
  • compared with
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