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Technology has made people's lives more stressful. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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make
people
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stressful
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stressed
, who spend many hours with new
technology
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. I disagree with
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make
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individuals life
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individuals' lives
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 and comfort zone with new
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 of
technology
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. On the one hand,
People
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 with AI
easily way and faster
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people
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mechanics,
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 good quality. If things would be with
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quality,
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 sell
it
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 for more money and profit.
Technology
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 reduce stress because
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 can save time
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they
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 it is very comfortable.
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lazier
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 they do not want
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 physical
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 the mechanism go to wrong and does not
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 can be person will be with it nervous and
headache
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people
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 have
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an illness
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illness
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illness,
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 they should drink more
pain killers
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painkillers
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hospital
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the hospital
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 more
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 they will spend more money
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 healthcare and
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hospitals, thereby
people
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 only for their health
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 they will lose
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 to more healthcare center and they
will maybe early
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may
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 die
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earlier.
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 In conclusion,
technology
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AI,
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 it can
benefits
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have benefits
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 and disadvantages.

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task response
Answer the question more clearly. Say early that you disagree, and keep this same idea in all body parts.
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Add one or two clear main ideas, then explain each idea with a simple reason and one real example.
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Do not change the topic. Write about stress from technology, not only about health or money.
coherence and cohesion
Put one main idea in each body paragraph. This will make your essay easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Use easy linking words well: First, Also, However, For example, In conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Make your support stronger. Some points are not fully explained, so the reader may feel lost.
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You give a clear opinion: you mostly disagree.
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You talk about both good and bad sides of technology.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You use some linking words like On the one hand, On the other hand, and In conclusion.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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