In many cities, planners have separated schools, homes, shops and offices into specific areas which are widely separated from each other. Do you think the advantages of this policy outweigh the disadvantages for city residents?

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planning
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make it harder for businesses to grow spacilly startups and small businesses, because
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access
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Answer the main question more clearly. Say if the good points are more than the bad points, and keep this view clear in the whole essay.
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Write one clear main idea in each body part, then explain it more. Some ideas are too short, so the reader wants more detail.
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Use examples that are easy to understand. Your bank example is good, but explain it in a simpler and clearer way.
coherence and cohesion
Make your ideas flow with simple link words like first, also, but, and so. Some parts jump too fast.
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Check paragraph order. Your essay has an intro, body, and end, which is good, but the end does not give a clear final answer.
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Use clear topic sentences at the start of each paragraph. This helps the reader know your point right away.
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You answer the topic and talk about both sides of the city plan question.
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You include one real-style example to support your idea.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear basic shape: introduction, two body parts, and conclusion.
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You try to connect ideas with words like on one hand, on the other hand, and in conclusion.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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