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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habitats in five Australian cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart illustrates the weekly expenditure of households and how they spent the money in eight different
method
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methods
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 in 1968 and 2018. The units are measured in proportion.
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, it is evident that most of the families spend their budget on food in 1968, wherese the lease of them prefer spending their money
in
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on fuel
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Fuel
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 and power.
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,
The
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the
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 leisure witnessed the
highst
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highest
 percentage in 2018 , and the lowest was in both
fuel
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 and personal goods. The significant difference between the two years was in Food. Moving to the details,
In
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in
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 meals,
Fuel
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 and power, clothing and footware and personal products
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,
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they were the most popular options in 1968. The percentage of families
prefer
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that prefer
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 eating meals reached a peak at 35% and
then
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 dramatically declined to around 18% in 2018.
Fuel
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 and power
was
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were
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 accounted for about 7 % and 3% in 1968 and
2018
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2018,
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 respectively,
the
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and the
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 household goods recorded the same proportion between
theis
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these
 two years.
One
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On
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 the other hand,in the remaining
category
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category,
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 they were the most famous in 2018.
the
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The
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 fraction of
population
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the population
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used
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who used
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 their Salary on Housing was 15% in
1968
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1968,
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then
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 it steadily climbed to approximately 24% in 2018.
Additionally
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,
The
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the
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 leisure method was the preferred one
between
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among
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 the others in 2018
which
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, which
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 was above 20%
and
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, and
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then
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 it decreased to below15% in Transport.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words fuel with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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