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You are currently taking an evening training course to improve your professional skills. However, due to recent changes in your work schedule, you can no longer attend the classes at that time.Write a letter to the course coordinator. In your letter:Explain what course you are taking and why you like it.Describe the changes to your work schedule and why you cannot attend anymore.Ask about alternative options, such as changing to a morning or weekend class.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter in reference to the evening soft skills course in which I am currently enrolled. I would like to express
that
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how highly beneficial I find the program because it has already improved my
day today
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day-to-day
 communication at work.
To begin
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 with, one of the
employee
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 at my work has fallen sick
and
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, and
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 I was asked to take over his project
which
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leads
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 to
spend
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 more working hours in the evening and got in conflict with my evening classes scheduled.
Therefore
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, I cannot continue
attend
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this
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 course until next month.
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, I would like to pause it here and rejoin in the next month after a colleague returns
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to his position. I am requesting you to move my leftover classes to next month by considering my current situation. Yours sincerely, John

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task response
Task response: You answer all parts, but the last part is not full. Ask clearly about a morning or weekend class.
task response
Task response: Say the name of the course more clearly and add one more reason why you like it.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your ideas are clear, but some lines are hard to follow. Use short and simple links like 'First', 'Because of this', and 'Could you'.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Keep one main idea in each paragraph. One paragraph for the course, one for work change, and one for your request.
task response
Task response: You explain the work problem and why you cannot go to class now.
task response
Task response: The tone is polite and right for a letter to a course coordinator.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear start and end.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: You use basic linking words like 'To begin with' and 'Therefore'.
The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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