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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a paritcular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph illustrates the number of people visiting a
paritcular
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particular
 Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Overall
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,
visitors
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 staying on cruise rose significantly over the period,
while
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visitors
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 staying on
island
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the island
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 slightly fluctuated from 2010 to 2017 . At the beginning,
visitors
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 staying on cruise ships were 0.25
million
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of
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visitors
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 in 2010
and
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 it
then
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 increased to 0.5
million
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visitors
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 in 2011 before dropping to nearly 0.25
million
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 in 2012. after that increased significantly throughout the year until
,
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 reaching
to
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a peak of about 2
million
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 in 2017.
visitors
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 staying on
island
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the island
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, on
other
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the other
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 hand, it started at about 0.75
million
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visitors
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 , increased slightly between 2011
to
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and
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 2012. after it began
slightly
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steadily from 2013 to 2015 at around 1.5
million
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visitors
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.
it
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 dropped to approximately 1.25
million
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visitors
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.
it
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 recovered and
a
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reached a
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peak of about 2
million
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visitors
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 .

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • upward trend
  • steady increase
  • peak
  • stabilization
  • notable change
  • market saturation
  • seasonal variations
  • tourism infrastructure
  • external factors
  • global economic conditions
  • persistent popularity
  • demand patterns
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