Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets, and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

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In the modern era, there is drastically increase in purchasing online
things
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as
curriculam
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curriculum
books, food and
traveling
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travelling
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tickets
are
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, which are
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easy to access in every place. There are both pros and cons
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situation. If asked, the
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demerits
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situation
surpasses
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the merits. My inclination is
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discussed
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ensuring
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ensuing
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paragraphs with appropriate examples. Discussing the avantages buying online
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things
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, things
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are more popular because of the
advance
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advanced
technology, the biggest
is
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advantage is
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that via online order
groceries
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, groceries
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are available just in
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a few
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hours or in a day.
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is the reason more
people
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are
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prefer to order by using
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an application
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, if they
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are at
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a
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work they recieved in their home without any physical visit.
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, more
people
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are
angaging
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engaging
in their work
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they do not have
time
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for other
things
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,
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options are good for them. They just need to focus on
profession
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their profession
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or study, just by clicking one tap on
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their phone
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phone
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phone,
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they get
things
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easily without any responsiblities not only wasting
time
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but
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save
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fuel. For
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example
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,
In
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Canada, there are
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a number
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of
things
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are
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available online
and
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, and
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more
people
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are
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prefer it because of exesseblity or offers. They are
more free rather
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freer
than
other
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in other
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contry
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countries
, they spend
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leisure
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to
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their family and travel on weekends. On the
contary
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contrary
, there are some drawbacks too. To
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begin
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with, following e-shopping sometimes getting worse, more
bussiness
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businesses
are showing
differnet
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different
photos
at
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apply
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online
are
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that are
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fack and consumer getting expired or dirty
things
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, getting scammed
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has
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higher chances
to
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for
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the buyer.
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is because some
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create fake
website
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websites
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and get
buyer
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buyers'
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money
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and
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, and
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after that consumer did not
recieved
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receive
any
money
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or
and
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a
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product
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by
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from
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them. So
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is
record
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a record
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showing from past years.
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, if
people
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do shopping by eletronacallly they suffer from
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return
issues or return charges, and by returing
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product
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product,
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they want to give in returen shop to
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follow
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all the return
polisy
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policies
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they getting late
money
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after
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submitting return
product
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.
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,
My
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friends
are
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just scammed about $ 10,000 to purchase air tickets for travelling in
dubai
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,
they
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and they
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are still not getting
thier
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their
money
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back.
To conclude
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, there are
few
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a few
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merits
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as
,
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apply
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easy to get products or
things
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in
timely
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a timely
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manner
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also
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, also
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without
consuimg
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consuming
time
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and
money
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by vistiting in physical store. But there are many demrits scammed, fake
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product
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products
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, expired
things
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too.
However
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, my arguments prove that
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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of
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situation are more than
advantages
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the advantages
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.

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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • time-saving
  • wide selection
  • competitive prices
  • discounts
  • accessibility
  • global marketplace
  • availability
  • fraud
  • scams
  • lack of
  • physical interaction
  • personal experience
  • impersonal
  • customer service
  • delays
  • delivery
  • return process
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