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Band 2.5

describe a custom from your country that you would like people from other countries to adopt, explain your choice, using specific reasons and example.

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Introduction
I live in a
contry
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country
 named Kuwait
and
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, and
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 we have
alot
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a lot
 of customs that
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I
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 would love if
people
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 started useing for exampel we are used to
viset
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visiting
 our family
in
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 the weekend or our friends.
In
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addition
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addition,
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 we are used to donating to
people
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 in need
and
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 think that
every
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everyone
one
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 should
also
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 do.
Body paragraph 1
The
mane
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main
 tradition
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 would
recomnenind
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recommend
 is
visetinf
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visiting
 our family and
frinds
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friends
 weekly
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. The reason
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 for
that is
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 to
mainten
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maintain
 kindness between them. For exampel if you visted any
one
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 you
know
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know,
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 they will
became
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become
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 more
wilaing
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willing
 to
viset
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visit
 you back. But
Some
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some
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people
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 may find it a bad custom because they
dont
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don't
 want
any
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anyone
one
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 to
vist
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visit
 them.
Body paragraph 2
Anwther
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Another
 custom I love is donating to
any
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anyone
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 who needs help wthout any
one
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 knowing. If every family started Givin
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 in need thery country would became more safer becase their wiil not be any
people
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 in need
Conclusion
In samery I know that if
people
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 started
visting
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visiting
 and donating like our
people
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we
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, we
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 would have a safer and closer world.

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coherence cohesion
Write one clear main idea in each part. Then add one reason and one short example.
coherence cohesion
Use easy linking words like first, also, because, for example, and in the end.
task achievement
Make your answer fully fit the task. Choose one main custom and explain why other countries should adopt it.
task achievement
Give more clear examples. For example, tell how weekly family visits help old people, children, or busy parents.
coherence cohesion
Check that every sentence supports your main point. Do not add ideas that are not fully explained.
task achievement
You answered the topic and gave customs from your country.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear ending.
task achievement
You used reasons like kindness, safety, and being close to support your ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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