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The graph shows the amount of fruit produced in four countries (France, Spain, Germany, Turkey) from 1970 to 2010.

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The line graph illustrates how many
tonnes
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 of fruit
production
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 in
Spain
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, France,
Turkey
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 and
Germany
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 between 1970 and 2010.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the highest tonnage of fruit was produced in
Spain
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which
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, which
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 was all time highest.
While
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Turkey
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 experienced an increasing trend,
Germany
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experenced
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experienced
 decreasing trends.
However
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, France productaion faced fluctuation. In 1970, the
production
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 amounts of
Spain
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 and
Turkey
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 were nearly 6 and 2
tonnes
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respectively
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, respectively
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.
Germany
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's
production
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 increased sharply and reached
at
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apply
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6
tonnes
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of
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apply
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production
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 in 1980
which
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, which
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 was all time highest.
Although
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 the
production
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 level fell dramatically between 1980 and 2010 and reached 5
tonnes
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, it was considered a huge
production
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 compared to other nations. In the meantime, the
production
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 in
Turkey
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 steadly increase to 3.5
tonnes
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 in 2010.
During
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In
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 1970, the
production
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 level of
Germany
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 was the second highest after
Spain
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.
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, it declined dramatically from 1970 to 1990. After that, it remained steady till 2010 , but France's
production
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 fluctuated
, at
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. At
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 the beginning
its
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, its
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production
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 was the lowest till 1980,
then
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 it exceeded
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Germany's
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Germany
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production
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 capacity in 1990, declined in
production
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 capability till 2000, grew drastically and reached almost 3
tonnes
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 in 2010.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words tonnes, production, spain, turkey, germany with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • produce
  • trends
  • decrease/increase
  • production
  • peak
  • fluctuation
  • stability
  • volatility
  • significant
  • milestone
  • conjecture
  • harvest
  • agricultural
  • yield
  • decade
  • data representation
  • timespan
  • graph analysis
  • comparative
  • rankings
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